The beach clean up!

Beach clean up

Last Friday us seniors went to the beach clean up We were quite 

amazed of how many rubbish we found lying on the beach. We found heaps of rubbish

Cans,  glass and even cigarette butts.  

The Tangelo The tangelo looked like an orange, bumpy thing. The tangelo feels bumpy an slime. The tangelo smells like it's nosy an it smells good. The tangelo sounds like an orange but like gooder. The tangelo tasty like an orange but cool This is my tangelo descriptive writing. I was learning how to make a good writing. For the tangelo I've done a good writing. But I didn’t use my onomatopoeia and my similes And I hope I do a good tangelo writing next time.

My Tangelo

                                   The tangelo Sonny boy

The tangelo looks like a orange ball.

lt feels like a squishy orange.

It smells like a small juice orange.

It taste like  orange juice.

It started like bubbles popping in the skin when i rip the skin.

I was bowing when idea at a time

I like it when I felt the tangelo and it was soft like a lollie and when I opened it I heard bubbles popping in the air.

My Tangelo

The Tangelo

The Tangelo looks like an bumpy, Orange stress ball.

The Tangelo feels like an scrunch up  pace of orange  paper wrapped up in gladwrap every well raped .

Smells like a yummy worm smell of summer.

The Tangelo sounds  like a crispy, crackly sound.

The tanglo tace not just like an orange but like a sweet juicy mouth watering tasty loley.

The skin of the Tangelo   is a sower sweet tace

As I bite into it and the juice squirts everywhere.

My learning in my Tangelo story I have been trying to put adjectives in my writing and I tried to make it make sense and use the 5 senses in my writing as well.

I learnt to use adjectives in my writing and I think I did it well with that.

My Tangelo

                    The Tangelo

The Tangelo felt hard, soft, bumpy and wrinkled with an orangery color. The Tangelo skin smelt sweet, smooth, strong and ripe. The Tangelo tasted nice, juicy and sweet. As I removed the peeling and took a bite the flesh squirted out and ran down my arms and I felt crushing in my mouth. I was focusing on how the tangelo felt like,taste,smelt,

I was learning about how my tangelo tasted like smelled like looked like. I did well on creating a slide and learning different nouns and I could  focus on making my descriptive writing more interesting.

My Apple

My juicy red apple...

I was looking at my red shiny apple,

It felt as cold as a ice cube.

I put my apple close to my ear,

I tried to peel it with longish nails.

It made a like a fizzing sound like a fizzy drink,

I gazed at my polished apple one more time.

I took a small bite like it was bitten by a mouse,

I took another bite and it was bigger.

I took a few more big bites,

all you can see was the brown and white seeds.

That was how my apple got gobbled up!

My Learning Map

I think  I did well while doing my learning map because, I wrote what helps me and how much it helps me.

My Yummy Tangelo

22/02/17

Tangelos

CRACK as I feel the delicious ingredients organising into my hands, as the juicy water drips into my hand making it into a swimming pool. It tasted like a magical fairy tale with juicy wet organic seeds. It sweet as a pie. WOW the sour flavour washing down my mouth, making my mouth numb. It sounds like a humongous wave about to fill my mouth with yummy flavours, it was really lumpy and bumpy around the outsides, it was sour as vinegar.

A couple of weeks ago Mrs Pou brought in some tangerines. We had to write about the 5 senses. What it looks like, what it feels like, what it sounds like, what it tastes like and what it smells like. We also had to describe our writing and do a onomatopoeia for the start of the story. Next time maybe I could you adjectives, adverbs and alliteration and find more about why there tangerines.

My Yummy Tangelo Story

22/02/17

Tangelos

CRACK as I feel the delicious ingredients organising into my hands, as the juicy water drips into my hand making it into a swimming pool. It tasted like a magical fairy tale with juicy wet organic seeds. It sweet as a pie. WOW the sour flavour washing down my mouth, making my mouth numb. It sounds like a humongous wave about to fill my mouth with yummy flavours, it was really lumpy and bumpy around the outsides, it was sour as vinegar.

                  THE END!!!

A couple of weeks ago Mrs Pou brought in some tangerines. We had to write about the 5 senses. What it looks like, what it feels like, what it sounds like, what it tastes like and what it smells like. We also had to describe our writing and do a onomatopoeia for the start of the story. Next time maybe I could you adjectives, adverbs and alliteration and find more about why there tangerines.