tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6788538659706494398.post562433630267580761..comments2023-06-04T03:48:20.279+12:00Comments on Te Ngahere @ Paihia School: What did I do or WALT: What I was doing was writing about a time with friends and whanau. What I think I did well: I jumped straight into the story and I put more descriptive words. What I think I could do better next time: I could make the story a bit longer.Blogadminhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09877318800529828508noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6788538659706494398.post-5468638557302365782016-04-12T09:11:43.653+12:002016-04-12T09:11:43.653+12:00Hello Jordan, I liked that you put in your WALT so...Hello Jordan, I liked that you put in your WALT so I know what you have been working on. I think your target is in a lot of pain after being hit in the face. I don't think you have to make your story longer, as long as you capture the attention of the reader you'll be fine.Chantalhttp://stbernadettesroom6.blogspot.co.nz/2016/03/chantal.htmlnoreply@blogger.com